The pronouns for two of the characters were all over the place, first they were established and then they were constantly misgendered in dialogue and inner monologue.
I can get behind one or two characters speaking like that, but all of them? The no-bullshit, down-to-earth killing machine (who's the POV for most of the chapters) that is literally described as "just a weapon" speaks AND thinks like that? I don't believe it.There were also a lot of spelling mistakes and parts of sentences that will probably be corrected in editing. Or maybe they did and I just didn't recognize it beneath all the words. On top of that, they didn't really do much in the story, didn't make many decisions that would allow them to show who they were, so they were not very distinguishable. Unfortunately, the writing took away from both.The characters did not seem too different from each other, because they all spoke with the same voice and used the same flowery language. I also liked getting to know the characters one after the other. I wish we would have learned more about that. It took a lot away from the story, which could have been told in have the pages and, if you took away all the overuse of language, was unfortunately not that exciting after all.Which makes me sad, because I did like the premise and the worldbuilding was super interesting. I found this very distracting and, frankly, unnecessary.
Especially the verbs, adjectives and adverbs. It seems the author lost a bet and now needed to incorporate every single word in the Oxford English Dictionary in this one book. If I hadn't been so distracted by the writing.This book has. The blurb of this book sounded right up my alley, and the story would have been, too.
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